In the
beginning there was nothing but God and the Angels. One day God sat on his
throne in a ponder. In deep thought about what he wants to do with the
universe. So he decided to create man. So he sent the angels to gather all the
souls from the lands in which he would use to mold this new creation out of
clay.
Amongst the
angels was Satan who was also considered to be one of the righteous angels.
Satan heard talks of the creation of Adam and decided to go see this for
himself. So he hurried through the heavens until he reached the room where
Adams mold laid. There he saw what looked like a man only there was no soul.
Satan knocked on Adams mold and heard that it sounded hollow. Arrogance began
to fill Satan’s heart “I am made of fire and this creature is nothing but clay”
he muttered.
Days later
God decided to breathe life into Adam and Adam had awoken. His eyes opened up
to something new, innocence and light oozed from his eyes as he observed his
surroundings. News of Adams birth spread throughout paradise, so god gathered
the angels around his thrown to inform them of Adam coming to life. “Oh ah” the
angels said in awe. “Behold this is Adam and he is to dwell amongst you”
commanded god.
“Will you
favor man over us, whom you know will shed blood and spread mischief and
corruptions” replied the angels.
“I know that
which you know not” replied god of the heavens and the earth. So he ordered
them to all fall in prostration to Adam. Not in worship to him but out of
respect. Therefore all the angels prostrated to Adam in full submission of
the creator except Satan. Who possessed so much resentment in the creation of Adam,
“Why have you disobeyed my command” asked god.
“Because I am
superior over this man. You made me out of fiery smoke whilst he is only made
from dust. How dare I prostrate to such a thing” boasted Satan. And so he was
excused. During Adams first few days of living he was given the honor and the privilege
to name all the creatures and beasts of the earth; big or small. Thus, god gave
him dominion over them all in that he was never to be harmed by them.
For days and
days Adam wondered the kingdoms of the heavens. Educating himself in the
wonders of god. He began to feel a sense of loneliness. His heart ached, and felt
there was a void. He was missing love and someone to share this with. So he set
to go to gods throne. “O lord of the heavens and the earth, I am ever so grateful
for blowing life into me, but I feel so alone here. There is only one of me and
many of the angels could you grant for me someone to complete me” asked Adam.
“I shall
create for you a wife so you may find peace and tranquility in each other”
replied god. So god put Adam to sleep and created Adam from his lower ribs. Time
had passed, and Adam had finally woken up to a creature that looked similar to
him. She had eyes just like him and a body just like he did. But he noticed she
wasn’t to be exactly like him she appeared softer, more slander and petite then
he was. Her eyes were like piercing pearls staring through his soul. They
starred at each other mesmerized by each other, as eve had waited for him to
wake. “Eve….” muttered Adam “you shall be called eve”. And so he named her Eve.
From spending their days together the two had fallen in love. So god placed
them in the gardens of Eden. Here they were to dwell for eternity. However they
was not to eat from the tree of good and bad knowledge. Until one day the serpent
made his way into the gardens and whispered evil thoughts in to Eve persuading
her to eat from it “ you want to reach endless immortality and power like god,
then you must eat from this tree as did he” whispered the serpent. Poisoned by
corrupt thoughts Eve ate from the tree and was confronted with the angel of
death. Out of fear of parting with Adam, Eve decided to feed him from the same
fruit so Adam would never know what it is like to love another other than her.
The news of
their sin spread throughout the heavens leading to their expulsion from the
gardens and onto the earth where they were to forever dwell and produces sons
and daughters until the day of judgment.
(stained glass in Sarthe, France)
Authors Notes: I choose this story because the creation of man intrigues me. The way in which our beginning came about is a very controversial topic in both science and religion. I believe we do come from Adam and Eve and that throughout time we did evolve into the way we are today in comparison to those before us we are somewhat more intellectually advanced. Although we may have shrank in size as mentioned in the origin of this story. I don’t thing I have done this story justice in the word limit I was given as I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
Bibliography:
The Legends of the Jews by Louis Ginzberg (1909): Volume 1.
The Legends of the Jews by Louis Ginzberg (1909): Volume 1.
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I liked your story. I think you did quite well on retelling the story of Adam and Eve. Not to be a critique but towards the end of your story you have some grammar and spelling mistakes. I know this happens to everyone. If you can catch them early for your storybook then when you have to edit it the following week it will be much easier. I speak from experience. Great job again this week! Also you still have your word verification on.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very odd story. From a religious standpoint it was unsettling as this is not what Genesis tells us, but from a purely literary standpoint it was remarkably clever. You took one of the more original of creation tales and made it look more like others. There were elements seen in most creation tales added in, like Satan's objection to Adam and angels having to lie prostrate, which were very interesting to see here.
ReplyDeleteThe English major is gonna come out a bit now, please feel free to ignore me if you want. You used "thrown" as in "tossing across the room" instead of throne as in where a king sits, and the third sentence sounded a little awkward. Some capitalization inconsistencies as well, but if you want to have a friend or someone read it aloud before you post it you can catch most all of those mistakes easily. People reading to you honestly is the best editing tool I've ever found. It was a great story over all, just needs a bit more editing.